Hawaii Sun

Written at home in 1984 while sitting in front a picture of a young woman on the beach in Hawaii. Rediscovered earlier today at the back of a folder. It's very clunky and a bit 'first-draft-y' but reproduced here as originally penned.


You'd be fine as a classical allusion
Fine as a creature of myth
Lovely, perhaps, in an ancient saga.
Yet you sit there now, it's no illusion
Real and here. Surely....you're a myth?

You'd be great as the painter's sitting
perfect as the herione of old
Ideal, i think, as the femme fatale.
Yet you sit there now, just.....waiting.

You'd be very welcome as my next partner
"Would you care to dance?"
You dance, you would, so beautifully.
Yes do, sit down, just to recover.
Real and here. Please don't grow old.

You were so dazzling as a bride
So wonderful as a wife
So good, I know, in all you did.
Yet I sit here now, with no illusion
Real and here. Knowing my myth grew old.


(c) msb 1984


Oh yes, reader, a few years later I married her.